'Withheld' First Edit

Here it is! The first edit of my opening sequence 'Withheld' :




As well as completing my first edit, I have also created a questionnaire in order to get audience feed back for my opening sequence. 

 I decided to use open questions as opposed to close questions, as they allow me to great the greatest amount of detail from my target audience.  Through these questions, I hope that I will get constructive critism about things that need changing, and things that I am doing well.